英诗译-今见一只蝶(五言)

鲍海飞 译 2010-2-8

Today I saw a butterfly

Author Unknown

柏舟老师独具匠心，发现我翻译的诗《今天看见一只蝶》，如果用五言句式结构会更紧凑，读起来会更具韵味，我试着将这首诗歌再翻译成五言句，题目亦改为《今见一只蝶》。谢谢柏老师指正！

Today I saw a butterfly,
as it floated in the air;
Its wings were spread in splendor,
Unaware that I was there.

今见一只蝶，

空中翩翩舞；

羽翼展秀美，

未晓我旁立。

It was such a thing of beauty,
It was a sight to see;
It was the perfect masterpiece,
Full of grace and majesty.

物美竟如此，

一瞥即可见；

完美世杰作，

优雅与壮丽。

I found myself thinking,
to what can this compare?
And then, of course, I thought of you,
And I wished that you were there.

忽然我沉思，

有谁堪与比？

忽然想到你，

多想你旁立。

God sure was extra careful,
When He formed and fashioned you;
You too, became a masterpiece,
Yet God is still not through.

上苍亦小心，

造就你无异；

你亦一杰作，

上苍何尽美。

He's daily making changes,
that other folks can't see;
You're already true perfection,
At least you are to me.

大道育生机，

凡夫莫见谛；

你已很完美，

至少对我是。