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科技英语写作基础(系列):分析abstract on ocean observing system

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Satellite Salinity Observing System: Recent Discoveries and the Way Forward

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评论:Satellite xxx Observing System 可以模仿一下。

https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fmars.2019.00243/abstract

[1] Advances in L-band microwave satellite radiometry in the past decade, pioneered by ESA’s SMOS and NASA’s Aquarius and SMAP missions, have demonstrated an unprecedented capability to observe global sea surface salinity (SSS) from space. 

 

[2] Measurements from these missions are the only means to probe the very-near surface salinity (top cm), providing a unique monitoring capability for the interfacial exchanges of water between the atmosphere and the upper-ocean, and delivering a wealth of information on various salinity processes in the ocean, linkages with the water cycle and climate, and constraints for ocean prediction models. 

评论:top cm的cm应该拼写出来。“upper-ocean”在这里不应该有连接符,因为不是做定语。Linkage with the water cycle是“专业”上有点“歪”了,因为oceans是the water cycle的一部分。

 

[3] The satellite SSS data are complimentary to the existing in situ systems such as Argo that provide accurate depiction of large-scale salinity variability in the open ocean but under-sample mesoscale variability, coastal oceans and marginal seas, and energetic regions such as boundary currents and fronts. 

评论:that provide是定in situ systems,中间夹了such as Argo。我会用“,which provide”;或者用“ ,such as Argo,”

 

[4] In particular, salinity remote sensing has proven valuable to systematically monitor the open oceans as well as coastal regions up to approximately 40 km from the coasts . 

评论:避免用prove。另外,B as well as A。我觉得作者用反了。

 

[5] This is critical to addressing societally relevant topics, such as land-sea linkages, coastal-open ocean exchanges, research in the carbon cycle, near-surface mixing, and air-sea exchange of gas and mass.

评论:如果你仔仔细细考虑一下,research in the carbon cycle是带了蛇脚。

 

[6] In this paper, we provide a community perspective on the major achievements of satellite SSS for the aforementioned topicsthe unique capability of satellite salinity observing system and its complementarity with other platforms, uncertainty characteristics of satellite SSS, and measurement versus sampling errors in relation to in situ salinity measurements. 

 

[7] We also discuss the need for technological innovations to improve the accuracy, resolution, and coverage of satellite SSS, and the way forward to both continue and enhance salinity remote sensing as part of the integrated Earth Observing System in order to address societal needs.

 

Keywords: Salinity, remote sensing, Earth's observing, future satellite missions, SMAP, SMOS, Aquarius

Received: 03 Oct 2018; Accepted: 23 Apr 2019. 

Edited by: 

Laura Lorenzoni, University of South Florida, United States

Reviewed by: 

Paul J. Durack, Lawrence Livermore National Laboratory, United States Department of Energy (DOE), United States 
Meric Srokosz, National Oceanography Centre, University of Southampton, United Kingdom 
Semyon Grodsky, University of Maryland, College Park, United States  

 

 

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