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已有 1163 次阅读 2019-4-19 10:00 |个人分类:Scientific Writing|系统分类:教学心得| 科技英语写作

分析的目的是为了提高科技英语写作水平,不是针对作者。

 

The Tropical Atlantic Observing System

https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fmars.2019.00206/abstract

 

[1] The tropical Atlantic is home to multiple coupled climate variations covering a wide range of timescales and impacting societally relevant phenomena such as continental rainfall, Atlantic hurricane activity, oceanic biological productivity, and atmospheric circulation in the equatorial Pacific. 

好好学习:用绿色标出。

评论:impacting societally relevant phenomena读起来不够顺。

 

[2] The tropical Atlantic also connects the southern and northern branches of the Atlantic meridional overturning circulation and receives freshwater input from some of the world’s largest rivers. 

 

[3] To address these diverse, unique, and interconnected research challenges, a rich network of ocean observations has developed, building on the backbone of the Prediction and Research Moored Array in the Tropical Atlantic (PIRATA). 

评论:has been developed?

 

[4] This network has evolved naturally over time and out of necessity in order to address the most important outstanding scientific questions and to improve predictions of tropical Atlantic severe weather and global climate variability and change. 

 

[5] The tropical Atlantic observing system is motivated by goals to understand and better predict phenomena such as tropical Atlantic interannual to decadal variability and climate change; multidecadal variability and its links to the meridional overturning circulation; air-sea fluxes of CO2 and their implications for the fate of anthropogenic CO2; the Amazon River plume and its interactions with biogeochemistry, vertical mixing, and hurricanes; the highly productive eastern boundary and equatorial upwelling systems; and oceanic oxygen minimum zones, their impacts on biogeochemical cycles and marine ecosystems, and their feedbacks to climate. 

评论:分号用对了,但是,句子实在有点长。

 

[6] Past success of the tropical Atlantic observing system is the result of an international commitment to sustained observations and scientific cooperation, a willingness to evolve with changing research and monitoring needs, and a desire to share data openly with the scientific community and operational centers. 

 

[7] The observing system must continue to evolvein order to meet an expanding set of research priorities and operational challenges. 

 

[8] This paper discusses the tropical Atlantic observing system, including emerging scientific questions that demand sustained ocean observations, the potential for further integration of the observing system, and the requirements for sustaining and enhancing the tropical Atlantic observing system.

评论:感觉这句话也可以放在开头?

 

 

Keywords: tropical Atlantic Ocean, Observing system, weather, climate, Hurricane, biogeochemistry, ecosystem, Coupled model bias

评论:大写、小写有点乱用。

 

 

Received: 31 Oct 2018; Accepted: 02 Apr 2019. 

Edited by: 

Gilles Reverdin, Centre National de la Recherche Scientifique (CNRS), France

Reviewed by: 

Sophie E. CRAVATTE, Institut de recherche pour le développement (IRD), France 
Laurent Coppola, UMR7093 Laboratoire d'océanographie de Villefranche (LOV), France  

 

评论:这些info应该有助于期刊的质量。

 

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