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科技英语写作基础(系列):阅读marine primary production

已有 882 次阅读 2020-1-27 05:17 |个人分类:Scientific Writing|系统分类:论文交流| 科技英语写作

 The goal is to learn how to write better.

分析的目的是为了提高科技英语写作水平(不是针对作者)

Green highlight is used to show good writing.

好好学习:用绿色标出。

Yellow means "questionable."

平时匆匆忙忙,上完色,就收尾了。这几天,大家蜗居在家,我也贡献一点“乐趣”。

Seasonal variations of marine environment and primary production in the Taiwan Strait

https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fmars.2020.00038/abstract

The first data set of seasonal marine environment and euphotic zone integrated primary production (IP) variations in the Taiwan Strait was reported.

评论:这句话是典型的头重脚轻的被动态句型。能避免,则避免。IP是一个常用缩写。不如用IPP”was reported”不是太好。

 

The measured annual IP was 123±86 gC m-2 y-1 (338±235 mgC m-2 d-1), and its seasonal variations can be described with a left-skewed normal distribution curve. 

评论:variation很多时候不需要“s”。described BY。我觉得这套资料应该不短,我会用现在时(fact)。

 

The average seasonal IP values from the highest to the lowest were summer (664±270 mgC m-2 d-1), autumn (350±118 mgC m-2 d-1), spring (202±110 mgC m-2 d-1) and winter (137±68 mgC m-2 d-1). 

评论:我会用现在时。

 

The lowest IP was during the nutrient-rich winter because it had a short insolation duration, low incident photosynthetic active radiation (PAR) and low light transmission (shallow euphotic zone depth) due to strong vertical mixing. 

评论:我会用现在时。PAR是常用的缩写,但是依然应该定义一下。

 

In contrast to the winter, the highest IP was during the nutrient-depleted summer, which had a long insolation duration, high incident PAR and high light transmission (deeper euphotic zone depth). 

评论:我会用现在时。

 

In addition, the heterotrophic nutrients from upwelling in the south might also support the highest IP in summer. 

 

As three primary water masses exist in the Taiwan Strait and three of them have different characteristics, different mixing ratios of water masses may cause different chemical and hydrographic conditions, which leads to different levels of Chl a concentrations and primary production.

评论:water masses本身就是特征不同,不必画蛇添足。

 

It is worth to mention that offshore wind farm (OWF) construction in the Changyun Rise (CYR) of the Taiwan Strait is on-going. 

评论:It is worth mentioning that。不再用的缩写,不要定义。

 

As primary production is the foundation for a marine ecosystem and supports the food web and fish stock, the results of this research can not only be used as the baseline for evaluating the OWF impact on the marine ecosystem but also be used for assessing their influence on fishery resources.

评论:可以用can be used not only as … but also for … 节约一点点版面费。

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