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已有 5058 次阅读 2011-3-22 00:47 |个人分类:科学随笔|系统分类:论文交流

一年没写博文了,干什么呢?
- 忙实验,写文章,写论文。
 
今天又开始写博文了,为什么呢?
- 还在忙实验,还要写文章,不过论文基本完成了。
 
今天导师把毕业论文的最后部分看完了。他指出了我的一个超级句子,让我修改。原句是这样的:
 

However, the following issues need to be addressed in future studies: (1) the causal relationship among augmented hippocampal CRHR1 signaling, dendritic remodeling and stress-evoked memory loss; (2) the potential interactions between CRH and glucocorticoids (and other stress mediators) in modulating the above-mentioned effects; (3) the mechanisms underlying the relatively rapid recovery of chronic stress-induced alterations ((Conrad et al., 1999; Luine et al., 1994; McEwen, 2001), but (Elizalde et al., 2008)) and the spatiotemporal dynamics of CRH and CRHR1 during and after chronic stress exposure; (4) the differential effects of several factors such as the intensity and controllability of the chronic stress (chronic, predictable stress may facilitate spatial memory (Parihar et al., 2011)) and gender/sex hormones (McLaughlin et al., 2005) that may influence the cognitive performance under stress.

 
我比较喜欢把内容精炼,所以时常在一个长句里装载很多信息。尤其是这是论文的讨论部分,在论文前4章里,我确实讨论得比较疲劳了,就想写个短点的general discussion。不过这句话,自己看了一遍,汗也下来了。
 
导师说,这句话原则不错,只是style的问题。信息量大,其中又加了不少引用和讨论。你大声一读,气都不够喘,读了下句就忘了上句,修改。
 
于是,我把四点改成了四句话,读起来舒服多了。
 

However, several issues remain to be addressed in future studies. First, it would be interesting to test the causal relationship among augmented hippocampal CRHR1 signaling, dendritic remodeling and stress-evoked memory loss. Second, more studies are needed to characterize the potential interactions between CRH and glucocorticoids (and other stress mediators) in modulating the above-mentioned effects. Another interesting question to be answered is the spatiotemporal dynamics of CRH and CRHR1 during and after chronic stress exposure. Fourth, the mechanisms underlying the relatively rapid recovery of chronic stress-induced alterations (Conrad et al., 1999; Luine et al., 1994; McEwen, 2001) need to be investigated, though long-lasting changes induced by chronic stress have also been reported (Elizalde et al., 2008). Additionally, the differential effects of several factors, such as the intensity and controllability of the chronic stress (chronic predictable stress may facilitate spatial memory (Parihar et al., 2011)) and gender/sex hormones (McLaughlin et al., 2005) that may influence the cognitive performance under stress, should be considered.

 
改完general introduction和general discussion,就进入排版校稿阶段了。给自己留两个星期校订。之后希望有更多时间上科学网。今日,在博客里留个脚印,做个纪念。


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