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科技英语写作基础(系列):分析一篇abstract(海洋专业)

已有 1412 次阅读 2019-2-25 07:05 |个人分类:Scientific Writing|系统分类:教学心得| 科技英语写作

我常常改海洋、气象、气候研究的文章。今天分析一篇海洋专业的摘要。 

分析的目的是帮助青椒提高科技英语写作水平。我是针对摘要,不针对作者。

Climate Change and Atlantic Multidecadal Oscillation as Drivers of Recent Declines in Coral Growth Rates in the Southwestern Caribbean

评论Climate Change有点Recent Declines in Coral Growth Rates用两个s,也没有必要。in the Southwestern Caribbean标题中,可以不用the。

 

https://www.frontiersin.org/articles/10.3389/fmars.2019.00038/full

 

[1] Historical records of growth rates of the key Caribbean reef framework-building coral Orbicella faveolata can be fundamental not only to understand how these organisms respond to environmental changes but also to infer future responses of reef ecosystems in a changing world. 

评论:can be不如arein a changing world用得不错。

[2] While coral growth rates have been widely documented throughout the Caribbean, the drivers of coral growth variability remain poorly understood. 

评论:While不如Though

[3] Here, we provide a record spanning 53 years (1963–2015) of the coral growth parameters for five O. faveolata core samples collected at Serrana Atoll, inside the Seaflower Biosphere Reserve, Colombian Caribbean. 

[4] Coral cores were extracted from reefs isolated from direct anthropogenic impacts, and growth estimations (skeletal density, linear extension, and calcification rates) were derived using computerized tomography. 

[5] Master records of coral growth parameters were evaluated to identify long-term trends and to relate growth responses with sea surface temperature (SST), the Atlantic Multi-decadal Oscillation (AMO), North Atlantic Oscillation (NAO) and Southern Oscillation indexes, aragonite saturation state (Ωarag), and degree heating months (DHM). 

评论:responses with不如responses to。作者没有坚持“a, b, and c” (format),因为(NAO)后面少了逗号。degree heating months (DHM)应该是DHMs

[6] We found significant negative relationships between density and mean SST, maximum SST, AMO, and DHM.

评论:这篇摘要的最大问题在这里。Relationship(s) between a and b. Whose density? What kind of mean SST? Area mean? Time mean? 

[7] Moreover, density showed significant positive correlations with NAO and Ωarag

评论:虽然我们不知道density是谁的density,这句话比【6】清楚多了。

[8] Extension rate did not show significant correlations with any environmental variable. 

评论:correlations不需要s

[9] However, there were significant negative correlations between calcification and maximum SST, AMO, and DHM. 

评论:和【6】一样的毛病。

[10] Trends of coral growth indicated a significant reduction in density and calcification over time, which were best explained by changes in Ωarag

[11] Inter-annual declines in calcification and density up to 25% (relative to historical mean) were associated to the impacts of previously recorded mass bleaching events (1998, 2005, and 2010). 

评论:删previously

[12] Our study provides further evidence that AMO and Ωarag are important drivers affecting coral growth rates in the Southwestern Caribbean. 

[13] Therefore, we suggest upcoming variations of AMO and future trajectories of Ωarag in the Anthropocene could have a substantial influence on future disturbances, ecological process and responses of the Caribbean reefs.

评论:variations of AMO不需要s。作者没有坚持“a, b, and c” (format),因为ecological process后面少了逗号。


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